‘I s’pose you’ve heard of that guy that died in ancient times, but I’ll tell you why…
a certain son of a …. Let’s get this straight. There was once this…’
well,
an hombre by the name of Narkissos who
was birthed between kisses and ripples
between swirls of blues and turquoises
stilled on an instant between breaths
of a willing nymph and a river — God! but what
he was, he is, was always and infinitely is
pretty pretty pretty, actually and definitely perfection its self
caught in a reflection of him self
he came out perfectly formed on tongues of water
he came out at himself sideways at first, perplexed
floated on a ruisseau gently filled face to face at last
and be came conscious of him self
a perfect pool crystallised to flesh
he, an apple caramelised, his admirers lyricised, hypnotised
affected by his pheromones, his dulcet tones, his astounding beauty — God!
set to sticky sweet, to salt, at addiction — he, attracts a plethora of lesser
beings bee-wings being — as unrequited whinings best ignored but is there fault?
for who could not resist the calling
for falling falling falling
deep deep deep in love
this vision, vision vision
water falling, cascade of drops, of lost selfs, lost lush to
damnation, admiration, as sickly elixir as ever was
getting thinner thinner thin as water
‘well, that still sparkles long after the disaster
well, the myth, and a name retained, is all that remains
well, that, and a flower — an echo echo echo of this
well, ain’t that fair,’ pronounced Nemesis
NaPoWriMo day 21:-
prompt based in the myth of Narcissus. After reading the myth, try writing a poem that plays with the myth in some way. For example, you could imagine that imagine the water is speaking to you, the narcissus flower. Or you could write a poem in which the narcissus berates the Kardashians for stealing their neurosis. Or a poem that comments on the narcissism of our time, i.e. beauty and body obsession, etc.
Love it!
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Thanks Angela
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Love that you know the myth in depth. So many gorgeous bits of wording here. I particularly love “was birthed between kisses and ripples
between swirls of blues and turquoises
stilled on an instant between breaths”
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Thank you Nora. I knew, of course, of narcissus, but I did go and and ask our pal Google for some more depth
Thank you for your comment. Happy happy to have my words mirrored back
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Love the playfulness in this stanza:
“he came out perfectly formed on tongues of water
he came out at himself sideways at first, perplexed
floated on a ruisseau gently filled face to face at last
and be came conscious of him self
a perfect pool crystallised to flesh”
Every word belongs–nicely done!
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Thank you so much. High praise coming from such an illustrious poet. Big smily face this morning
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I doubt I’m anywhere close to ‘illustrious,’ but I’m glad you’re smiling. 😊
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lots of little newborn lambs of words frollicking on the meadows of tour pages!
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And 18 real lambs already born on the farm. Due date isn’t until Sunday, so these are a bonus.
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And you helped them into life?
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Not at all. Just manage them afterwards. The sheep do all the work. We watch over them
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